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« on: November 20, 2011, 06:31:13 PM »
When I first decided to play 40k I immedaitely didn't like the human fluff. I wanted to play Imperial Guard none the less but with other alien species involved. More Mass Effect and less Starship Troopers if you would. So rather than just play a Tau nation myself and Willx decided to make it a bit more interesting and write our own fluff where humanity is a small fish in the galaxy. As we mostly only play with each other (not in that way) it doesn't matter too much if we bend the odd army list here and there.

Anyway Humans are there, but they aren't all powerful and have to work with other nations to stop themselves being crushed. Also they are all broken up into smaller factions so that they can fight each other as much as anyone else. Whilst i'm going to cheat and largely include GW races in various guises i've started working on a new set of fluff. (Orks will be neutral and smarter, Tyranids less psychic, dark elves/space marines not existing anymore)

Anyway, please do read my work here and give me some feedback. It's largely unfinished and i'm not really happy with the pacing on the actual author section rather than the commentator.

A New Beginning - The brief history of humanity part one.

By Doctor Heim Stenmelson.


Niece, please find attached an extract from this comphrensive book. At our last holiday get together you asked me a great many questions about the time of the fall. Whilst the festival of Ullis got in the way of our discussion I felt the need to feed you more knowledge. This should quench your thirst until next we meet I hope. Whilst the good doctor is not a true historian (largely he is actually a botonist as some of the lengthier sections on wild flowers in the colonisation section show) he does go to alot of effort to be vaguely accurate. Naturally if you are wanting a true academic account you are more than welcome to study any of the official documents - however they are quite difficult reading I assure you. Instead find closed my annotated notes of this mostly true and thankfully brief document.

I hope you can find to read these between your studies. I know psychology is a time consuming task at the academy but it allways pays to know where you've come from. - Lorne Stromstead. Your loving uncle.

I'm going to apologise for his prose, spelling and sense of the dramatic in advance.


The Advent of the Arks. - Survival.

The world as we knew it came to an end in 2324, the pretty struggles of the past century becoming irrelevant as a gigantic meteor crashed into the ocean. It's cataclismic impact ending billions of lives. But perhaps it is better to start before that, to look at the middle of the tale rather than the end. For whilst the world was destroyed, it did not signal the end of our history - rather it heralded a new beginning.

For as long as humans have existed there had been conflict. Different nations rose and fell destroying each other and occasionally themselves. It had forever been the norm. Towards the late 2290's the world was split into roughly seven conglomerates of nations.(1) Each possessed wealth and weapons enough to destroy one another many times over. The alliances tied to each other through neccessity rather than affection. Indeed the Fello Alliance were quite litterally half the world appart, they had no real ties than one of tactical viability. Of course it goes without saying that some of these new alliances were stronger than others but seven is a fair number.(2)  Through their alliances the nations established a notion of peace with only a few sporadic border wars by proxy nations under their influence occuring.

This enforced peace continued uninterupted until 2312 when everything changed. The O'Halligan telescope (3) reported the existence of the meteor known as ME.304, or better known to us all as the Doomsday Stone. Now whilst it was obviously very far away it had immediate effects on the world stage. Even the most optimistic astrophysics professor predicted that the death toll would be massive and the after effects universal. A summit was called with every nation on the planet in attendance for the most emminant scientists to give their suggesions. (4). The long and the short of the event is that there was only one legitimate option - evacuation.

This led to the design of the Arks. (5) Massive ships of ludicrous size that would hold as many people as possible not to mention livestock, animals and botanical produce. - section deleted. Seven hundred words about the various trees being stored is not interesting. - Now space travel was still in its infancy at the point and whilst there had been perhaps thirty manned space missions to various moons there had been nothing on this scale. Some of the Arks were alot more successful than others yet all of these behemoths were designed with experimental technology on a limited time frame. For more information please see Van Halensteins thorough description of each of the different Arks in his work "Salvation and Prejudice. - The flight from home." (6)

Now there were as many as nine billion people on Jagarlen (7) and it was not a legitimate option to evacuate the entire planet. It was unfeasible to say the least and each nation went about it in a different way. Our own ADL declared that there would be a lottery amongst the population to decide who got to leave and who had to stay, but there were others who took rather more barabaric means to allot their spaces. The Murisians declared martial law and imprisioned half their nation, deciding to take only the military and their familes. Whilst the Mogterial Hierarchy (MT) took the ludicrous decision to fill their Arks full of men and women under 35 with a 30/70% ratio leaving their old to die inevitable brutal deaths. (8) Still each took their own path to salvation. Which leads me promptly to 2323. The year of our flight.

1. The doctor fails to highlight the reason for these alliances. The fourth intercontinental war resulted in the major nations of Hale and Stromgard effectively pulverising each other into poverty and taking their neighbours down with them. Peace was only made with the Nelson Pact - an agreement between the major nations to go to immediate war on the aggressor in any major conflict.

2. Some historians count as many as twelve, however the Doctor is refereing to those nations that would eventually escape the apocalypse. Many others would count the ill futured PWD as an eigth. This is an obvious benefit of hindsight, it's unlikely the PWD would be considered minor if not for their ultimate fire based doom.

3. A curious and incredibly expensive telescope made by the ADL in 2268. Officially it was made to observe a local star system. Realistically it was made to show everyone how filthy rich and advanced they were. It was also shaped like a phallus.

4. Most of which were from our ancestors in the MH thank you very much.

5. The name "Ark" is a reference to the popular myth about Hannis and his boat of many wonders. In which the sherpard Hannis built a large and suprisngly seaworthy ship and attempted to store one of every animal within its hull to save them from an incoming flood. Of course the tale is a fable to discourage heavy drinking and at the end of the tale there is obviously not going to be a flood. Rather Hannis has filled a boat full of sheep that his children have painted various colours to confuse their alcoholic father.

On a less whimsical note the Arks can hold between 100,000 and 1,000,000 people depending on design and nation of origin. Our own Arks can hold roughly 600,000 people and are less likely to plummet from the sky on re-entry unlike those of the Hales. They also smell better than the ADL's.

6. Don't bother, it's a book full of vague estimations based on no evidence. He does get the colours right though which is something.

7. The author is a member of the modern decendants of the ADL and this is their own name for our old home.

8. A widely popular and mathematically viable decision if a little lacking in morals. On the plus side it would prove to be our saving grace after the incident of the Veneria Massacre. Not that many outside of our culture know of this event. Of course it might only have been seen as popular by the young men selected to go..
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Re: Homegrown fluff.
« Reply #1 on: November 20, 2011, 06:36:40 PM »
Also, I wrote this without a spell check so expect mistakes!
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« Reply #2 on: November 20, 2011, 07:17:43 PM »
Ahem...

You should talk with mantic.
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« Reply #3 on: November 20, 2011, 07:29:03 PM »
Yeah, that might be a good idea.

Personally I love the Starship trooper style of religious fascism that is the Empire. That is what makes 40K interesting and not like other SF.
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But make something with that fluff and do not just let it gather dust as a homegrown alternative to the 40K universe!
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« Reply #4 on: November 20, 2011, 11:03:20 PM »
There's an item or two that detract from the overall positive creativity that I'd leave out, but beyond that it works, and look forward to reading more.  Also, I'd put parentheses around the numbers in the text for the footnotes.
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« Reply #5 on: November 21, 2011, 12:17:58 AM »
Thanks for your comments/reading it.

Talk with Mantic? I don't really follow.

Mathi - It's not that I don't like the guard, I apprieciate the idea of a force that is conscripted and used as human fodder, I just find the Imperium a bit difficult to work with. It's very generic and doesn't really inspire me. The different guard regiments are interesting, but ultimately they are all just various guard regiments. No real difference aside from one being a desert and one being a winterland. Though I did enjoy the Cain books as it gave them some humanity, even if it was just a sci fi copy of Flashman.

Gamespoet - What parts? I wrote all of this today in a spare hour or so, i'm not objectional to changing things. I've also hadded in brackets as you suggested. It works on my PC since my processor has them as little numbers as they would be in a book but on a forum you're quite right.

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The Escape.

It was a close call for most, the metoer hit scant weeks after the last Ark had set sail for the skies. Close to five hundred Arks took off from Jagarlan, with seventeen never making it past the atmosphere. (1) They scattered into the galaxy every which way, keeping close flottillas based on their origin. Some made it no further than a few planets before attempting to build artificial habitats on the faces of moons. Others declared themselves uninterested in recolonisation and simply decided to live on their new ships, living off recycled air and water. (2)

Perhaps the most curious thing was the reaction of those elected to stay. Generally these fell into two camps. For some, there were teary broadcasts of their civilians wishing their compatriots luck. Waving goodbye to their loved ones as they accepted their fate. (3) For others there were vague reports of widespread looting and pillaging, the societies breaking down into orgies of desperation. (4)

Our own ships went to the eastern rim where the O'Halligan telescope had predicted the greatest concentration of planets would be. Our great navigator Yuliza Hergova piloting the greatest of our Arks towards our eventual new homeland - deleted again. This patriotic rant goes on for quite some time. If you want to hear this nonsense then just look it up on your holoscreen. - Of course it did not all go our way. The Ark "Freedoms Hope" had a major overload and the passengers were killed in the resulting meltdown. (5) Generally this seperated us from the other fleets though we were dogged by some of the nations that had previously been our vassal neighbours. The single ramshakle Ark of the Doriah following in our wake. (6) Naturally our seperation did not last forever but for the moment we became a new galatic player. Whilst our ships would take ten years to even reach a planet we could consider inhabiting it was the beginning of our new empire. One that would span the face of the galaxy into eternity.

At this point the good doctors account stops being relevant. Whilst it does describe the event that led to the fleeing of our homeworld it doesn't include us for obvious reasons. Our own fleet headed to the north west towards where we lie now. As you will no doubt know from your history lessons we would eventually interact with them again during the second interstellar conflict. But that was not for another hundred and thirty years. The ten years it took them to establish their nation were nothing compaired to our own plight. I will find another source for you for the first contact incident and send it to your account. That is of course, presuming you enjoy reading my scrawlings.

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1. The majority of the seventeen were caused by poor designs. The PWD took the brunt of the death toll, of their original thirteen ships only one made it through the atmosphere. Curiously the two Arks from Ashalia were infact shot down by their own people disgrunted with their leaders selfish decision to save himself.

2. Having seen the junk fleet first hand the ships are probably safer in space than on a planet. It's a wonder they are skyworthy.

3. Some of the most depressing footage ever seen no doubt.

4. Much more likely than the sob stories. If you're interested there is a report in the archives of some of the MH citizens attempting a last ditch attempt to establish an airial base to escape the destruction. As to it's success there is no such information, it seems doubtful at best.

5. Suprisingly common. One of the smaller Arks in our own fleet suffered the same fate. I won't go into the details of what happened to the passengers however it's enough to say that 'cooked' is probably enough information. The cause was discovered and prevented from re-occuring. At least on our own ships.

6. The Doriah "Ramshackle" ship was actually the most advanced piece of technology to leave the planet.
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« Reply #6 on: November 21, 2011, 09:17:42 PM »
Mantic Games is currently develping a 40K clone, I notice similar elements in what you have written and what they have thus far developed.
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« Reply #7 on: November 21, 2011, 11:39:25 PM »
I had a quick read through their sci fi stuff.

Don't see any similarities. They had lots of space dwarfs and corporations.
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Re: Homegrown fluff.
« Reply #8 on: November 22, 2011, 02:34:09 PM »
Very good!

Where are the goat-lions though? Have I missed them or have they not appeared yet?


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Whilst the Mogterial Hierarchy (MT) took the ludicrous decision to fill their Arks full of men and women under 35 with a 30/70% ratio leaving their old to die inevitable brutal deaths.

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Mantic Games is currently develping a 40K clone, I notice similar elements in what you have written and what they have thus far developed.

I expect most sci-fi contains similar elements! I doubt the mantic fluff will be winning any originality awards.
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« Reply #9 on: November 22, 2011, 05:29:09 PM »
Taking some more time for the first part ...

When I first decided to play 40k I immediately didn't like the human fluff. I wanted to play Imperial Guard none the less but with other alien species involved. More Mass Effect and less Starship Troopers if you would. So rather than just play a Tau nation myself and Willx decided to make it a bit more interesting and write our own fluff where humanity is a small fish in the galaxy. As we mostly only play with each other (not in that way) it doesn't matter too much if we bend the odd army list here and there.

Anyway Humans are there, but they aren't all powerful and have to work with other nations to stop themselves being crushed. Also they are all broken up into smaller factions so that they can fight each other as much as anyone else. Whilst I’m going to cheat and largely include GW races in various guises I've started working on a new set of fluff. (Orks will be neutral and smarter, Tyranids less psychic, dark elves/space marines not existing anymore)
Enjoyed Starship Troopers when I was a kid, loved playing the board game, yet wasn't thrilled with the movie.  Not familiar with Mass Effect.  What is its basic story line?

I like the idea of creating one's own fluff, but using the 40k figures and rules.  Looking forward to seeing how you work the Orks, Tyranids, and Tau into it.

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Anyway, please do read my work here and give me some feedback. It's largely unfinished and I’m not really happy with the pacing on the actual author section rather than the commentator.

I'm going to edit below for spelling, putting all the foot notes inside the sentences, and then provide some other comments ...

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A New Beginning - The brief history of humanity part one.

By Doctor Heim Stenmelson.


Niece, please find attached an extract from this comprehensive book. At our last holiday get together you asked me a great many questions about the time of the fall. Whilst the festival of Ullis got in the way of our discussion I felt the need to feed you more knowledge. This should quench your thirst until next we meet I hope. Whilst the good doctor is not a true historian (largely he is actually a botanist as some of the lengthier sections on wild flowers in the colonization section show) he does go to a lot of effort to be vaguely accurate. Naturally if you are wanting a true academic account you are more than welcome to study any of the official documents - however they are quite difficult reading I assure you. Instead find closed my annotated notes of this mostly true and thankfully brief document.

I hope you can find to read these between your studies. I know psychology is a time consuming task at the academy but it always pays to know where you've come from. - Lorne Stromstead. Your loving uncle.

I'm going to apologize for his prose, and sense of the dramatic in advance.


The Advent of the Arks. - Survival.

The world as we knew it came to an end in 2324, the pretty struggles of the past century becoming irrelevant as a gigantic meteor crashed into the ocean. It's cataclysmic impact ending billions of lives. But perhaps it is better to start before that, to look at the middle of the tale rather than the end. For whilst the world was destroyed, it did not signal the end of our history, rather it heralded a new beginning.

For as long as humans have existed, there had been conflict. Different nations rose and fell destroying each other and occasionally themselves. It had forever been the norm. Towards the late 2290's the world was split into roughly seven conglomerates of nations (1).  Each possessed wealth and weapons enough to destroy one another many times over. The alliances tied to each other through necessity rather than affection. Indeed the Fello Alliance were quite literally half the world apart, they had no real ties than one of tactical viability. Of course it goes without saying that some of these new alliances were stronger than others but seven is a fair number (2).  Through their alliances the nations established a notion of peace with only a few sporadic border wars by proxy nations under their influence occurring.

This enforced peace continued uninterrupted until 2312 when everything changed. The O'Halligan telescope (3) reported the existence of the meteor known as ME.304, or better known to us all as the Doomsday Stone. Now, whilst it was obviously very far away, it had immediate effects on the world stage. Even the most optimistic astrophysics professor predicted that the death toll would be massive and the after effects universal. A summit was called with every nation on the planet in attendance for the most eminent scientists to give their suggestions (4). The long and the short of the event is that there was only one legitimate option - evacuation.

This led to the design of the Arks (5). Massive ships of ludicrous size that would hold as many people as possible not to mention livestock, animals and botanical produce. - section deleted. Seven hundred words about the various trees being stored are not interesting. - Now space travel was still in its infancy at the point and whilst there had been perhaps thirty manned space missions to various moons there had been nothing on this scale. Some of the Arks were a lot more successful than others yet all of these behemoths were designed with experimental technology on a limited time frame. For more information please see Van Halensteins thorough description of each of the different Arks in his work "Salvation and Prejudice: The Flight from Home" (6).

Now there were as many as nine billion people on Jagarlen (7) and it was not a legitimate option to evacuate the entire planet. It was unfeasible to say the least and each nation went about it in a different way. Our own ADL declared that there would be a lottery amongst the population to decide who got to leave and who had to stay, but there were others who took rather more barbaric means to allot their spaces. The Murisians declared martial law and imprisoned half their nation, deciding to take only the military and their families. Whilst the Mogterial Hierarchy (MT) took the ludicrous decision to fill their Arks full of men and women under 35 with a 30/70% ratio leaving their old to die inevitable brutal deaths (8). Still, each took their own path to salvation. Which leads me promptly to 2323, the year of our flight.

1. The doctor fails to highlight the reason for these alliances. The fourth intercontinental war resulted in the major nations of Hale and Stromgard effectively pulverizing each other into poverty and taking their neighbors down with them. Peace was only made with the Nelson Pact, an agreement between the major nations to go to immediate war on the aggressor in any major conflict.

2. Some historians count as many as twelve, however the Doctor is referring to those nations that would eventually escape the apocalypse. Many others would count the ill future PWD as an eighth. This is an obvious benefit of hindsight, it is unlikely the PWD would be considered minor if not for their ultimate fire based doom.

3. A curious and incredibly expensive telescope made by the ADL in 2268. Officially it was made to observe a local star system. Realistically it was made to show everyone how filthy rich and advanced they were. It was also shaped like a phallus.

4. Most of which were from our ancestors in the MH thank you very much.

5. The name "Ark" is a reference to the popular myth about Hannis and his boat of many wonders. In which the shepherd Hannis built a large and surprisingly seaworthy ship and attempted to store one of every animal within its hull to save them from an incoming flood. Of course the tale is a fable to discourage heavy drinking and at the end of the tale there is obviously not going to be a flood. Rather Hannis has filled a boat full of sheep that his children have painted various colours to confuse their alcoholic father.

On a less whimsical note the Arks can hold between 100,000 and 1,000,000 people depending on design and nation of origin. Our own Arks can hold roughly 600,000 people and are less likely to plummet from the sky on re-entry unlike those of the Hales. They also smell better than the ADL's.

6. Don't bother; it's a book full of vague estimations based on no evidence. He does get the colours right though which is something.

7. The author is a member of the modern descendants of the ADL and this is their own name for our old home.

8. A widely popular and mathematically viable decision if a little lacking in morals. On the plus side it would prove to be our saving grace after the incident of the Veneria Massacre. Not that many outside of our culture know of this event. Of course it might only have been seen as popular by the young men selected to go.

I think it was excellent that seemingly all seven nations, plus one, were included in the piece … Fello Alliance, Murisians, Mogterial Hierarchy (this one cracked me up), Hale, Stromgard, ADLs, Venesia, and PWD.

Beyond that, the spot where reference is made to taking trees, that seems odd, and maybe using “plants” is better.  The mention of the telescope looking like a phallus seems forced, like a when movie makers throw a bear chested woman into a picture, rather than letting it just happen naturally as part of the story.  Also, why is the planet named Jagarlen and not Earth?

Hope thats helpful, and I'll take a look at the second installment next.
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« Reply #10 on: November 22, 2011, 05:49:33 PM »
Here's the second one wiht spelling and footnote changes ...

The Escape.

It was a close call for most; the meteor hit scant weeks after the last Ark had set sail for the skies. Close to five hundred Arks took off from Jagarlan, with seventeen never making it past the atmosphere (1). They scattered into the galaxy every which way, keeping close to flotillas based on their origin. Some made it no further than a few planets before attempting to build artificial habitats on the faces of moons. Others declared themselves uninterested in recolonization, and simply decided to live on their new ships, living off recycled air and water (2).

Perhaps the most curious thing was the reaction of those elected to stay. Generally these fell into two camps. For some, there were teary broadcasts of their civilians wishing their compatriots luck, waving goodbye to their loved ones as they accepted their fate (3).  For others, there were vague reports of widespread looting and pillaging, the societies breaking down into orgies of desperation (4).

Our own ships went to the eastern rim where the O'Halligan telescope had predicted the greatest concentration of planets would be. Our great navigator Yuliza Hergova piloting the greatest of our Arks towards our eventual new homeland - deleted again. This patriotic rant goes on for quite some time. If you want to hear this nonsense then just look it up on your holoscreen. - Of course it did not all go our way. The Ark "Freedom’s Hope" had a major overload and the passengers were killed in the resulting meltdown (5).  Generally, this separated us from the other fleets though we were dogged by some of the nations that had previously been our vassal neighbours. The single ramshackle Ark of the Doriah following in our wake. (6) Naturally our separation did not last forever but for the moment we became a new galactic player. Whilst our ships would take ten years to even reach a planet we could consider inhabiting, it was the beginning of our new empire. One that would span the face of the galaxy into eternity.

At this point the good doctors account stops being relevant. Whilst it does describe the event that led to the fleeing of our home world it doesn't include us for obvious reasons. Our own fleet headed to the north west towards where we lie now. As you will no doubt know from your history lessons we would eventually interact with them again during the second interstellar conflict. But that was not for another hundred and thirty years. The ten years it took them to establish their nation were nothing compared to our own plight. I will find another source for you for the first contact incident and send it to your account. That is of course, presuming you enjoy reading my scrawlings.

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1. The majority of the seventeen were caused by poor designs. The PWD took the brunt of the death toll, of their original thirteen ships only one made it through the atmosphere. Curiously the two Arks from Ashalia were in fact shot down by their own people disgruntled with their leader’s selfish decision to save himself.

2. Having seen the junk fleet firsthand the ships are probably safer in space than on a planet. It's a wonder they are sky worthy.

3. Some of the most depressing footage ever seen no doubt.

4. Much more likely than the sob stories. If you're interested there is a report in the archives of some of the MH citizens attempting a last ditch attempt to establish an aerial base to escape the destruction. As to its success there is no such information, it seems doubtful at best.

5. Surprisingly common. One of the smaller Arks in our own fleet suffered the same fate. I won't go into the details of what happened to the passengers however it's enough to say that 'cooked' is probably enough information. The cause was discovered and prevented from re-occurring. At least on our own ships.

6. The Doriah "Ramshackle" ship was actually the most advanced piece of technology to leave the planet.
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The story telling seems a bit more scattered, but this also seems in line with the author being depicted, so no big deal.  Also, perhaps minor, but the planet's name is spelled differently in the second piece, Jagarlen vs. Jagarlan, and I left it that way.
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« Reply #11 on: March 24, 2012, 12:01:19 PM »
First Contact.

My dearest Heidi, as promised I have found some more time to send you some scribblings. I was pleased to hear that you enjoyed the description of the flight from Home. I hope the academy is treating you well, your mother informs me you are considering joining the military intelligence core. It would make your grandfather proud to know you are following in his footsteps. 

I've found a description of the First Contact incident like I promised. The author is a young trainee pilot named Frit who was on the Ark "Stronghand". This first hand diary was written soon after the event and can be considered a particularly haunting piece of work.

Don't tell your mother I sent you it. 


It feels quite odd to be inputting this. If anything I'd rather throw away the memory rather than preserve it but the doctor said that I should write down my thoughts. I'd refuse but the Admirals been pretty clear that it's not a voluntary decision so here we go I suppose.

It's been four weeks since we encountered the aliens, after so long alone in space it's hard to imagine that we could find anything else in the galaxy. (1) But Ullis knows how we managed it but we found a ship, and in honesty it looked pretty mediocre in design. It barely had the space to hold perhaps a few thousand people at most and the engines looked pretty poor even without knowing how they worked, they glowed a pale pink and left no wake. Presumbaly from the size it was some sort of scout vessel. The fact that I don't know should imply how well this story will go. Realisitcally it was nothing compaired to our Ark and aside from the fact it was alien in design it was of no real value. Had we known why it was abandoned I'd have recommended shooting it outright. Suffice to say when we tried to contact it the ship ignored all of our hails on all the various frequencies. Evenutally Admiral Halathu decided we should board the bloody thing and be done with it, declaring that we couldn't ignore the potential knowledge the ship could bring. Of course we all agreed at the time, it was just too exciting an oppertunity to pass up even if it had no strategic value. (2)

I thank Ullis for the fact that Admiral Halathu chose Damien to go with the first boarding party. I practically begged the old man to let me be the one to have the honour of piloting the men but he chose the other trainee. In retrospect it was the best thing that could ever have happened to me, I've become rather attached to my head and the idea of losing it like Damien is quite a turn off. The landing went well. - Removed some detail here, he writes quite alot about the boat they used to transport the landing party and it's procedure for departing. - We kept constant contact with the detachment sent to have a look at the ship. We had their communication helms locked in with those on the bridge so that we could hear what they were doing. Several of the men had inbuilt cameras so that we could see what they were doing as they moved around blindly searching, after all we had no idea of how the thing ws built or where anything was located. The inside of the ship was particularly spartan and devoid of decoration, everything was bare metal and brass in colour. Even from the ship you could hear all the fluid moving around the pipes all over the place at incredible speed. Every so often one of the men would report some green fluid on the floor which we took as some sort of oil. The scouting went on for twenty two minutes before they hit the control room. (3) It was like the ship was prepared for them, the room lit up and what appeared to be panels lit up all over the metal wall. Some wierd bug thing appeared as a picture and started chittering in some obscure language. There were no windows in the compartment which was hardly suprising considering the elaboarte system of symbols that were there. (4)

It was at this point that the noises started. It began with a roar, you could hear it through Cadet Johansons helmet as he was in the rear guard. It wasn't like a roar you'd hear from a lion, it was happier than that, as though the beast was excited. It was probably a blessing that the cadets helmet was one of the ones without a camera attached as the alien was on him so fast that he didn't even get a single shot off. We stood dumbstruck on the ship as we could hear the panicked voices of the boarding party, the men with the cadet shouting warnings and desperately trying to get a clear shot of the thing that had their companion. (5)



1.At this point the flotila had been in space for fourteen years. As Frit was only in his early twenties it's safe to say he'd spent most of his life aboard ship. I know it's hard to believe that we once were naiive enough to believe that there were no other races, but there was a time! It's also worth noting that they didn't seem to try very hard to scout effectively unless there was a viable planet noticable.

2. Stronghand was the advance Ark of our fleet. It was roughly three weeks in advance of the others and was significantly smaller than the others. It was a strategy to prevent the others all getting caught up in potentially crippling situtaions. This proved to be a prudent measure on two other occasions. It had standing orders to be just about as invasive as possible if it encountered other vessels such as this one.

3. He's oddly specific, either guessing or traumatised by the event to the point of actually knowing. It's assumed that it was the control room.

4. Quite a few modern ship designs don't bother with windows. It's apparently safer since it reduces chance of atmospheric collapse to the pilots. Personally I'd prefer to be able to see my enemies than rely on technology. Also, on a side note the 'wierd bug' thing is a fairly simple way of describing our friends the 'Hat-ru'. Not that he'd have known that at the time.

5. It was unlikely that Johanson would have been alive. The aliens that had killed the Hat-ru on this ship are a completely different type of wierd bug thing. Generally they have serated teeth and long claws that don't really result in flesh wounds. Call me callus but i'd probably have shot anyway
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Re: Homegrown fluff.
« Reply #12 on: March 24, 2012, 12:24:23 PM »
I like it!

I wonder if we could do a 40K campaign that somehow integrated this fluff? Probably not.
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« Reply #13 on: March 24, 2012, 12:28:04 PM »
I'm writing a whole host of background stuff for the races. Basic info and all that jazz.

Shall I post it in the bat cave? Also known as our Campaign forum?
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« Reply #14 on: March 24, 2012, 12:47:54 PM »
Go for it!
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« Reply #15 on: April 01, 2012, 04:26:41 AM »
Good to see you've done some more. :icon_cool: :::cheers:::
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« Reply #16 on: April 01, 2012, 02:00:38 PM »
I'm considering starting again. Either by basing it off real world nations or by not bothering to describe the start and skip to the current events.
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