Just read some of Graham McNeill's Empire Book,
It felt like the dialogue was flat and the grammar quite basic,
i gave up after 10 pages,
did this guy study english at university etc? Not meaning to sound snobbish etc, but it feels really amateurish
I might have to take up fantasy writing if this is the benchmark of success!
back to JR tolkien methinks
The Daemon reared up and stuck his sword into Pendrag's side, he yelled out in writhing agony , whilst his brethren looked in fear ,,,,,,,,, zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
wake me up when the story doesn't read like the Beano